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If this is a rough first draft, it's fine, but I agree with Dr Drib, it needs lots of polishing: learn how to use apostrophes, etc. Also, I think that you take the image of
"However, his family on the other hand, were locked in battle every night, a test of strength, horns clashed together and the bulls were fiesty."
too far; it becomes confusing. Also the double negative in the line:
"This wasnt an abnormality for Thomas"
would be better written as: "This was normality for Thomas".
At the moment I'm doing nanowrimo and writing a fictional biography about my house move, however I'm doing this as therapy with no thought of publication; it's too personal and has too many real people in it for publication. But other authors have published such novels during their lifetime.
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