Thanks so much for your feedback!
I think the lack of consonant sounds at the end are just my way of talking in general and that should probably change for narration.
Not sure about the tinny sound, but then again, the high pass noise can come from different types of speakers. On my laptop speakers and my recording headphones it's pretty full, but it wouldn't surprise me to find that it is a little bit.
I definitely won't have that "random house audio" studio quality to it, I don't have the money for that nice of a studio

I'm hoping to get as close as possible. Although I've heard some really crappy recordings on audible and I hope mine doesn't compare to that! LOL.
I've got 3 or 4 stories that I'm contracted to do with royalty shares which is nice, but the audio sample is a first crack and a full novel.
I appreciate the feedback, every little bit helps!!