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Old 09-01-2014, 01:44 AM   #4
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1. Rhyming couplets are about the "twee-est" form of poetry around. I'd suggest choosing a more interesting metrical pattern. But good on you for having a meter! The fashion today seems to be to write prose, split the lines in random places, and claim that it's poetry. Writing to a meter is much more challenging, and the result much more interesting to read.
A guide on choosing a more interesting metrical pattern would be nice. Do you have any guide ebooks to suggest?

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2. Pretty much all your semicolons really should be commas.
Thanks for that, and thank you for reviewing the whole composition.
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