[pshrynk]

I'm struggling a bit with trying to figure the ages of the children. I think if you were to spend some verbage on developing ages a bit more, it would benefit the tale by slowing down the shifts form one character to another, allowing for us to get a better feel for who is who.

Fast development of premise, however. I'm guessing a Quest Tale with a fellowship of at least three youngsters and the wizard cornelius? Maybe to free the Princess?