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Originally Posted by AlbertaCowboy
Love it love it love it!
Oh wait, Harry doesn't have a hat. Scrap it, it's no good. :P
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Check out this paragraph from the beginning of the FanFic story,
Harry Potter and the Winter Court. It almost stopped me from reading the rest of it...
arggghhh!
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.......Harry had suited up in all of his best gear, a new leather trench coat with strong enough protective enchantments to protect him from a loup garo, his newly carved Oak staff and blasting rod, his upgraded shield charm bracelet and force rings, and new combat boots. With his black shirt, dark jeans, .44 Magnum revolver, and wide brimmed hat, Harry looked like he belonged on the set of a western. Dresden even managed to slip Bob's skull into a travel bag without awaking the spirit of intellect.
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Of course the bold items aren't the only criticisms that can be levied at that paragraph, in my mind they're just the most egregious.
