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Originally Posted by arjaybe
It looks good, Graham. I'd call it done.
Jim
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Thanks Jim.
I've also uploaded a new version of
Planting The Flag, again, hopefully the final one.
I've put back in the controversial exclamation point as, hey, I like it.
More importantly I've changed the opening paragraphs to give me what I hope is a much more punchy and intriguing opening line.
To save you having to download the whole thing again... here's the new opening:
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The Mate worried that the Geologist would have no face.
She pushed away the broken pipes that blocked the lid of its shipping pod, scattering droplets of coolant which spun weightless through the air. The status lights were blinking amber, but not red. Amazing, considering that the impact had ripped away the next compartment of the starship and there was nothing beyond the bulkhead but vacuum.
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Graham