[arjaybe]

v1.2

You took care of the doorman's alcove nicely.

Something about the "Gavin sat on the sofa . . . the woman and the apartment." paragraph bothers me. That's a lot of things to say in one paragraph. I think you can say them all, but it feels awkward as is.

The glass snorting works well now.

Spoiler:

I get it now. She returned to the drinks cabinet with Gavin's drink and poured them drinks. My problem was that once she had Gavin's drink in her hand, I wanted her to do something with it. Well, obviously she put it on the cabinet.

Jim