[Graham]

Originally Posted by mrmarlowe

When My Father 'Died' - v.1-8 up now. I made a few changes, but

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Kept the chopper knife ending, still. Purpose to make the reader keep 'guessing': 'Was it? Or was it not?' a dream. Still mulling over whether to end the story at the point where Zant asks for the contract - or not

It's just that I am a huge fan of open endings. But let's see what others have to suggest on it. Thx for your input, as always.

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"WHAT??? Aww, shit. Must've been a nightmare", I mumbled, somewhat relieved.

I think you could have him respond in more detail to his mother here. Rather than him telling us that it was just a nightmare, you could show us him finding out and it would have more impact. He'd do that by asking what his mother meant about his father. He'd mention the shradh. She'd ask him what he was talking about, his father's alive, etc.

Graham