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MobileRead Short Story Anthology - [DISCUSSION & REVIEW]
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03-14-2014, 07:48 AM
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gmw
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Graham
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How about something like:
The lift stopped and the doors opened, and she pulled him gently out by his hand. There were only four apartments up here. Gavin followed her to the nearest.
He waited for her to close the door behind them and then he moved in and pushed her against the wall.
Yes, I do like that. Simple and doesn't intrude on the flow.
I might not upload an update straightaway. I'll see if anything else comes in.
Thanks.
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