Thread: MobileRead Short Story Anthology - [DISCUSSION & REVIEW]
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Old 03-13-2014, 07:58 AM   #141
Graham
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I'm not sure that element (the goddess speaking in her mind) is a good idea - except possibly at the very end. When it occurs earlier it becomes obvious that the goddess is speaking with her and nothing after that is any sort of surprise. It's unclear how much of a surprise it would have been anyway, but those italicised thoughts remove all doubt.
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That's true. I'm looking forward to seeing how Kat handles this in v2.


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