Thread: MobileRead Short Story Anthology - [DISCUSSION & REVIEW]
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Old 03-13-2014, 07:35 AM   #138
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Originally Posted by gmw View Post
ETA: A short story needs to kick off quickly. In version v1.1 I think you could have started at the second "chapter" without losing anything.
That's a very good observation.

Spoiler:
All Elani's thoughts in the first scene could be encapsulated in a moment of doubt over whether to knock on Marlena's door.


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