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Annie the Dreamer
I've uploaded version 1.1. I think it addresses the issues, such as the POV problem.
The rings - touching them with her thumbs is an example of the stereotyped behavior often found in emotionally troubled people.
The knife - just the kind of thing that might be left on the counter in such a house.
The sudden violence and abandonment shows how near the edge she was.
I didn't do much to the opening. Let me know if it's still confusing.
I think it's better. Thanks for your help.
Jim
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