Becca,
I hope you won't be offended by this, but I couldn't help noticing that in the original post in this thread, you put an apostrophe in a possessive "its" three times:
it's capitol city
it's wealth
it's final beta form
Could you just check and make sure that you haven't done this in the real story? It's the kind of thing that really bugs me (and other people, too) when people get this wrong.
Thanks
