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Old 01-31-2014, 10:00 AM   #13
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I'm glad you like it. If you decide to use any of it, you might want to fix the tenses. When I went into the history of the kingdoms, I used past. When it got into the meat of the story, I changed it to present tense as that's the norm for blurbs. In hindsight, I think it would sound better in the same tense throughout.
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