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Old 10-08-2013, 09:48 AM   #5
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I like the first paragraph. I might consider replacing "although frequently" with "often" or "though perhaps." A little shorter and it flows a bit better to me.

The second paragraph is part of the blurb? If so, I don't think "please note" is needed.
And are the stories really 5 to 10 years old? Or are they intended for children 5 to 10 years old?

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