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Old 07-11-2013, 09:38 AM   #121
QuantumIguana
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Originally Posted by Alyssa Miranda View Post
This is great writing - absolutely stunning, but to get its full impact you should read it as formatted by the author.
I actually took the time to read the thing. There are 1 inch margins on each side, so the text is squeezed into a column one inch wide. The first half of the story (it's quite short, or I wouldn't have bothered) was just some depressed guy sort of feeling like people were following him. After that, it got almost interesting. Still awful, of course. He hides in a hospital for weeks moving from one waiting room to the next, sort of blending into the lives of the other visitors. It's never revealed why people were stalking him, apparently, the stalkers got bored and moved on.

The blurb says "Find out what these men want from him and where he goes to find out." That's a strange thing to put in a blurb, because it really doesn't give you any information about the story. But we never do find out what these men want from him. Instead, one of "these men" talks to him very briefly, and says something vague like "You think it's going to be one way, but it's going to be the other way." Then nothing. We never find out what the one way or the other is; nothing happens with his stalkers.

If you're going to explicitly say "find out" in the blurb, that's a promise that the reader will find this out. But we do find out where he goes, it's kind of obvious, he goes to an ICU waiting room.

I guess the best I can say for this book is that I've actually seen worse.

Oh, the book ranks #4 in free medical fiction books. That looks impressive until you see there are only nine books in that category.

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