Liked the story, Kenny. I always like the way you set up contrasts to create an impact. This one is entirely unsubtle way before the end, but in flash fiction there's not a lot of space for subtlety.
There were a couple of corrections I thought:
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Hell this is nineteen fuckin’ sixty-nine you’d think they’d freeze dry all this shit.
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I thought you might want punctuation between the two clauses.
The extra apostrophe?
I don't have any issue with the simplistic language as it fits the narrator perfectly. I could do with a couple less swear words as it might have gone a little overboard, but again, it fits.