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Originally Posted by mukoan
Hi,
I'm having a little grammar issue here that I'm trying to get my head around. Out of the following two, which would be more grammatically correct:
(1)
The voice in her brain felt like it was dying - draining in strength along with the dark blood that leaked from her freshly opened leg-wound.
Compared to:
(2)
The voice in her brain felt like it was dying - draining in strength along with the dark blood leaking from her freshly opened leg wound.
The bit that's confusing me is "that leaked" versus "leaking". Is the first one mixing up present-tense with past-tense? It sounds OK to my ears... but this stuff always catches me out.
Cheers.
mk.
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Neither of them would jar me out of a good story, but
this is what sounds best in my head:
The voice in her brain felt like it was dying - draining in strength along with the dark blood
that was leaking from her freshly opened leg wound.