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Old 06-04-2013, 10:24 PM   #55
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Originally Posted by Turtle91 View Post
I think you need some blurb in there, but maybe a little shorter. Remove the middle 11 words after "tales" and up to "They" to leave: "These six modern fairy tales are just the right length..."
I did like the original, but can see the point with cutting some wordage. I think I'd drop the length bit as well. "These six modern fairy tales are just right for bedtime reading."

Hmm, while looking at this, the picture made me think of "Tea with the Black Dragon" by R. A. MacAvoy.
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