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Originally Posted by ApK
Your changes reflect a decided change in implicit meaning, which may not be what she intended.
Your way says the princess is forced into the only action available to her, and in her world, dragons eat princesses.
The original way suggests that she has full freedom to decide what to do, and while people SAY dragons eat princesses, our self-guided princess might follow a path that leads her to a different fact....
And I'm not sure that one reads better then the other anyway.
I don't think your last sentence reads well. My editing reflex always questions the addition of "which" and in this case I agree with the reflex.
And "these" in Becca's blurb refers to the stories in this collection. Not just "one of those things."
ApK
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Perhaps, but they were just suggestions, not something set in stone that she has to use. Just thought it might read better that way. Of course Becca is still free to use or discard any suggestions made depending on if she feels they work or not.