Quote:
Originally Posted by crich70
I do think it should rhyme if in the proper structure though I agree writer's like Shakespeare manage to have a rhythmic quality in their writing even without rhyme. I remember one 'poem' in a poetry contest I entered. It won the 1st prize though I couldn't see any rhyme or rhythmic qualities in it that identified it as such. My own entry was in rhymed couplets and was about Cupid. Oddly enough all I got was an honorable mention. [...]
|
I don't mind if a poem doesn't rhyme, but I like to be able to "see" the rhythm - and that's the problem I have with Shakespeare. Perhaps it's my Australian accent, but often it feels as if I have to push the words into unnatural contortions to get the rhythm. (And then I hear someone perform it and think: Ah, so that's how it's done! But as soon as I turn back to the words myself it all vanishes again.)
I liked your poem, but for me (who has openly admitted his ignorance on the subject
) the break in rhythm on the fourth pair lets it down.