Thread: The Ugliest Truth - Bad Writing
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Old 03-13-2013, 05:28 AM   #137
Yolina
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Well maybe I'm just fussy but I though it was superfluous and made the sentence clumsy. Somehow it just broke the flow and irritated me
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