I'll give it a shot but not for the typos or grammar errors (not my strong point) but for other kind of feedback.
By the way, I think you were maybe meant to use this Thread: https://www.mobileread.com/forums/sho...d.php?t=196579
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However, I cannot guarantee that I'll give you feedback by 1st December as I cannot read more than 1 hour a day on average.
I don't know if this matters to you but generally I don't read YA fiction so you would get feedback from someone outside the sub-genre.