Yes, the blurb works for me too. It strongly introduces the character of Abby and makes you want to know more about her story. Maybe a little tidying up here and there might be in order but not much. Too much working it over could ruin the freshness.
And actually I like the 'pathetic' father as for me, anyway,it shows a vulnerability in Abby that the other language doesn't. Was this intentional? If she's really a totally tough chic then change pathetic for something tougher.
It's got me in.
