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Format (what you refer to as "paragraphing") might change during the conversion to an eBook, but punctuation will not. Your punctuation - or lack of it - is appalling. Your sentence structure is not good, you have run-on sentences that constitute what should normally be paragraphs.
You are not ready to write, you need to learn the basics. You might be able to tell a story, but you are not capable of expressing it in writing. Perhaps a course in creative writing, or even some revision of high school English. Text books shouldn't be difficult to find. If you want to persist with writing at this low skill level, you will need to find a very good structural editor. Your writing needs a lot of work. I edit for a living and if one of your books somehow made it to my desk I would not read past the first page.
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