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Old 03-14-2012, 10:26 AM   #76
Steven Lyle Jordan
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Originally Posted by mr ploppy View Post
The first paragraph is good, and will appeal to your target audience. But the second paragraph makes you sound like a hack writer. I think it's mainly the "banging them out on a smart phone" that's at fault here. Other writer types will understand what you mean by that, but readers will see it completely different.
Thanks, that's something I can address.

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As the Mirror Cracks looks interesting, I've downloaded a sample of that. It's also encouraging that you got away with using a superhero called Zenith when there's already one with the same name that's trademarked, that gives me hope for my Humpty Dumpty story.
Is there? I didn't actually look, so I had no idea. Of course, if I was called on it, I'd have no problem changing the name, as it's not vital to the story. I guess we'll see how long it takes before I get that legal notice...
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