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Old 03-13-2012, 11:25 PM   #66
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This is the first time I've been asked to critique a nonfiction page but here goes. Overall, it seems like you're doing pretty well. My only critique is that I feel you have too much unbroken text in both your author profile and product descriptions. Honestly, I didn't read all of it.

I recommend adding more structure so that online browsers can skim just to the info they want. Perhaps I bulleted list in either of the two.

I like the photo for your cover. However, the current typography/color of the title blends in with the hair on the person's head and makes it a little difficult to see. You might experiment with different title typography in any future versions.

Other things to think about: is your Shelfari profile for this book filled out?
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