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Originally Posted by VydorScope
Wow you edited 12 books down to 1?!?! That is A LOT of fluff to remove. Must have been painful to loose all that work!
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Well, the original concept called for a total of 12 books. Or at least that's what was planned. But as anyone knows, no initial plot survives the first draft.
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Originally Posted by VydorScope
Bah lost my reply somehow... anyways I think the idea has merit. There is lots of room for some good subplots to full out a good full story. I do not know your background, so do you know much about infectious diseases? Their treatment? Their spread? Containment Etc? If not you might want to brush up on that a bit first.
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Yup, already covering that. Got plenty of medical people around here too whose brains I can pick.
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Originally Posted by phloxy
I love this story idea and the ending, too.
One thought: One of the cool things about "bugs" is that some people can be immune for no apparent reason, not just because they were able to avoid exposure. They will either have natural immunity or not be susceptible or have some other genetic predisposition against getting ill that becomes apparent as they remain healthy while everyone else drops like flies. This kind of thing happened during the plague and other large-scale flu outbreaks. Many of those who tended to the sick simply didn't come down with the bug. The survivors of a pandemic may, in fact, be unable to be infected regardless of their contact with the infected. They just aren't susceptible.
Of course, you don't have to be completely accurate on this point since this is fiction, but to make the "immortals" that much more evil, you could have them bringing the "breeders" in and performing gruesome laboratory tests on them before killing them to try to figure out how to develop and release a variant of the bug that will eradicate the breeders without having to smoke them out and kill them one by one.
I really think you've got a good idea for some books here! Nice work.
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Yeah, that's actually not a bad idea. That might be something to explain why the breaders didn't become immortals. Also, the "evil" immortals idea isn't bad either. It could in turn allow me to divide the immortals against each other, with several different groups all trying to come up with solutions to their dilemma, with still more out to stop any efforts the others might be making in order to ensure maintenance of the status quo.
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Originally Posted by Doitsu
Parts of the plot line reminded me a bit of Robert Merle's The Virility Factor.. I like your idea, but I find your ending a bit too predictable and too politically correct. It would be much more interesting if the bug in one of the immortals mutated and created a male or female immortal who isn't sterile... |
Good idea. As for the predictable ending, this is just a rough plot, so as I get into this I may totally diverge from the original idea for the ending. One possibility is that as the breaders have children, some of them become immortals, and some don't. This could in turn create a "dogs and cats living together" solution where, after a while they realize that, instead of fighting against each other, they find out that by combining forces they can put to use each groups advantages, while offsettings the others disadvantages to create a mutually beneficial co-mingling of the two groups.