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Old 01-21-2012, 12:03 AM   #2
CalmApparatus
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Well hello sir.
First of all, congratulations on your work. I like your style. I like the titles; very cool by the way. The book covers definitely have that indie appeal and your approach definitely has an active focus group.
I read the preview of "Death's Given Chance". I could feel you in there, in the writing, and I think 2012 is going to be a good year for you. Things will turn around.

My one spec of criticism is to(for the Smashwords page) do a better job with the short and extended pitches. IMO do not use the first two sentences of the book itself. It looks lazy.

1) Make the short description original. You are a good writer, you can do this.
2) Make the extended pitch different.

Let them both stand on their own, like little microcosms unto themselves.

Cheers, you're gonna do great!

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