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Old 01-20-2012, 09:22 AM   #1862
Koobe
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"Excerpt, From the Ashes"

Quite a few grammatical errors in that short passage (i.e. ...little boys’ voice - is there more than one boy? The Saloon - is that its name? Through the door I stopped, and not more than two feet in front of us, we witnessed... - comma frenzy) Might be worth doing another proof read.
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