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Old 12-14-2011, 06:37 PM   #6
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Originally Posted by VydorScope View Post
Having a hard time from the blurb knowing what the book is about...

The first one has no one/thing to connect with, while the second makes it sound like Lynn is a heroine who you will follow as she deals with bikers and has to rescue/find her son.

If that is not your story, then the second one does not work.

Does the book follow one main character? If it does, perhaps try writing what he/she/it thinks the story is.
They both fit really, it's just a question of which is likely to attract the right type of reader. Someone looking for biker gang mayhem probably won't mind the woman in peril subtext, but someone looking for woman in peril who triumphs against all odds definitely won't like the level of biker gang mayhem.

For someone with a mainstream sense of morality, Lynn would be the only likable character in it. But the bikers aren't villains, they just take advantage of the lawless situation they find themselves in.
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