I've had a glance at it, and it is chock full of punctuation errors and spelling mistakes. PLEASE take the time to properly proof-read your work before publishing it - it's this kind of shoddy work that gives independent authors a bad reputation.
A few examples from the first couple of pages:
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I then hear the voice I’d been waiting for, my mothers
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This just shows to the others kids
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It doesn't matter how good the story is if you don't get the basics of grammar, spelling and punctuation correct. Language is an author's basic tool; you must know how to use it correctly.