Quote:
Originally Posted by VydorScope
Hmm something mixed in here... maybe:
"The poor kid was just trying to do his job, which was take an crusty old pilot who had a bad habit of speaking his mind and making a polished public figure out of him."
(did not think of casting him as "young" but compared to Bill he probably is)
How does that read?
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Since I'm a nit-picker, I want it to say "make a polished public figure out of him?". Active, not passive.
In my head it flows better that way, take and make instead of take and making.