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Old 05-13-2008, 05:35 PM   #85
Taylor514ce
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Maybe instead of tech-ku, which should call these hai-tech? Har.

Not bad atall, Patricia. If I were your editor, I'd suggest tightening up just a bit, something like:

my far-off gaze
into the azure void:
blue screen of death

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