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Old 10-18-2011, 05:41 AM   #38
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I have real issues with this:

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Waylon had arrived long before sunrise this morning, as he always did, to ready the shop for its daily labor. The labor of a bladesmith was not an easy task, generally requiring the work of many specialists, but a simple blade as this could be done by one with dedication.
A blacksmith (or a swordsmith) usually worked alone, or at most with an apprentice or journeyman: there were not "many specialists" involved in his work.

Also the phrase "but a simple blade as this could be done by one with dedication." makes no sense. Perhaps you meant "but a blade as simple as this", or "but a simple blade such as this"?
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