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Old 07-25-2011, 11:23 AM   #11
Penforhire
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I agree with your other sources, use alternatives sparingly. Otherwise you're "telling not showing" too much. If a character says something angrily show us their anger instead.

I like the action tags mentioned. Depending on the lines, we can also follow ping-pong dialog without needing constant naming.
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