This is a very confusing description; you may wish to consider revising it:
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Originally Posted by Dawson Vosburg
The old man revealed that his parents
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whose parents? The old man's parents? That's what it sounds like...
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He tells Peter that he’s belonged on Pimrise all his life.
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"He"... "he's"... who does "he" refer to? It's not at all clear.
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Peter is made an apprentice at the map-making shop, meets friends and an adoptive elder brother, and learns of the island’s dark history and a mysterious rogue vigilante called the Incognito.
Incognito follows Peter’s adventures
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The mysterious rogue vigilante is following Peter's adventures? Or do you mean the book title? Again, clarify, eg by putting the book title in quotes if that's what you're referring to.
The description of your book is what will attract people to it. It's worth spending time working on it and getting it right.
Best of luck with your book.