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Originally Posted by GeoffC
The second reads rather clumsily imho , in other words - to me - it doesn't flow ....
but there would be nothing wrong with :
" I can't stand it anymore," John exclaimed, and then frustratedly slammed the book down onto the table ."
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or even, " I can't stand it anymore," John exclaimed, slamming the book down onto the table."
which is what i was thinking of... i agree, the second one *as it is there* reads rather awkwardly. but i don't think "exclaim" is the real culprit.