The second version is an improvement.
I actually like the concept and what you are going for.
However, you really need to sort out the text. It's not visible enough. It needs to be much larger. You need to make it
pop. I have a large screen and perfect eyesight, but that text is way to small for me. Other people will have smaller screens and less-perfect vision, and many others will be viewing on their Kindles etc.
Most eyeballs that see your cover will be on a
listings such as this. Those images are tiny. Your text must be readable at that size.
Dave