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Old 04-27-2011, 01:03 PM   #1036
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Hi, All.

@crich70 The Horn

Good story in this piece. Really nice word imagery and a nice flow, although; the rhythm of the couplets seemed a bit rough to me. Overall, though, a good read.

I do agree with your comment concerning "expanding it to something larger". It certainly has the makings of becoming a great epic poem.

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Vandy
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