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Nice, Caleb
Hi, Caleb.
Your Untitled is very nice and I'm sure a wonderful present for your wife.
Your word imagery is great -- I especially like the "As I fall into you, one drop at a time" couplet. Beautiful.
If I may offer some advice and I hope I am not "stepping on your toes", I think the second stanza would read better something like this:
"See me let go
And fly like an eagle.
The higher I soar
The longer I'm with you...
One day at a time."
Just my thoughts. I really enjoyed this and thank you very much for sharing.
Regards,
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