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Old 04-08-2011, 11:22 AM   #1019
kennyc
The Dank Side of the Moon
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Originally Posted by caleb72 View Post
This is great, but I would change one thing to make it read better (to me).

"His yumminess filling my tumminess"

That really works for me.

Regards
Caleb
Thanks Caleb.
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