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Vandy · 04-04-2011, 02:00 PM

Hello, All.

I can't believe it is has been since 4 January 2011 since I've posted in this thread. When you don't keep up, you sure do get behind...

@Geoff Your post of 1-16-2011
Quite interesting and certainly entertaining. you've got a nice touch with your word images. I especially like your repeating line - "Outside the shadows...". It's certainly a 'grabber".

Very well written.

Your post of 2-11- 2011
Bravo! Bravo! You have managed to capture the absolute essence of loving toil. Great word pictures as well as great coupling. This piece reads very well and flows along taking the reader with it.

Thank you for sharing this jewel.

@Caleb LOVE ME LIKE A TORTURE RACK
Before I even read this, I knew I was going to like from just the title!

Old or not, it certainly is well written. I had a bit of a problem with the "flow" but did try your suggestion of rreading it like two sentences. That helped.

You certainly have been successful with your word images -- they put the reader right in the middle of the storm that's raging.

Great work!

The Journey
After reading this, I ACHED for you and the knife-sharp message your poem conveyed. What wonderfully beautiful word imagery you've used in this piece. I'm quite taken with it.

Beautiful work.

By the way, Caleb, poetry is like music -- it is timeless and never forgotten.

WELCOME
I've got to say, I didn't see that ending coming...

I've never hear love expressed quite that way. Interesting...

@Kenny Winter
Hmmm... Do I take the literal path or retreat into philosophical thoughtfulness? Either way, this piece spoke to me on so many levels.

Kenny, this is very well written and in a rhythm that forces the reader to slow down and not just read but contemplate on what is being read.

Thank you for sharing this beautiful work.

That Big Ol' Potato Chip in the Sky
A very cute little ditty. I really like your descriptiveness. A liight and deliciously entertaining read!

Thanks so much, all of you, for sharing your work and allowing us a bit more of a glimpse "inside".

I look forward to reading more. I'll start posting again pretty soon, as well.

Have a great day!

Regards,

04-04-2011, 02:00 PM	#1006
Vandy ...always be humble. Posts: 116 Karma: 505917 Join Date: Sep 2010 Location: Fort Myers, FL USA Device: iPhone 5s, iPod Touch 3rd Gen, Kindle 3 WiFi, Kindle Fire	I'm still around... Hello, All. I can't believe it is has been since 4 January 2011 since I've posted in this thread. When you don't keep up, you sure do get behind... @Geoff Your post of 1-16-2011 Quite interesting and certainly entertaining. you've got a nice touch with your word images. I especially like your repeating line - "Outside the shadows...". It's certainly a 'grabber". Very well written. Your post of 2-11- 2011 Bravo! Bravo! You have managed to capture the absolute essence of loving toil. Great word pictures as well as great coupling. This piece reads very well and flows along taking the reader with it. Thank you for sharing this jewel. @Caleb LOVE ME LIKE A TORTURE RACK Before I even read this, I knew I was going to like from just the title! Old or not, it certainly is well written. I had a bit of a problem with the "flow" but did try your suggestion of rreading it like two sentences. That helped. You certainly have been successful with your word images -- they put the reader right in the middle of the storm that's raging. Great work! The Journey After reading this, I ACHED for you and the knife-sharp message your poem conveyed. What wonderfully beautiful word imagery you've used in this piece. I'm quite taken with it. Beautiful work. By the way, Caleb, poetry is like music -- it is timeless and never forgotten. WELCOME I've got to say, I didn't see that ending coming... I've never hear love expressed quite that way. Interesting... @Kenny Winter Hmmm... Do I take the literal path or retreat into philosophical thoughtfulness? Either way, this piece spoke to me on so many levels. Kenny, this is very well written and in a rhythm that forces the reader to slow down and not just read but contemplate on what is being read. Thank you for sharing this beautiful work. That Big Ol' Potato Chip in the Sky A very cute little ditty. I really like your descriptiveness. A liight and deliciously entertaining read! Thanks so much, all of you, for sharing your work and allowing us a bit more of a glimpse "inside". I look forward to reading more. I'll start posting again pretty soon, as well. Have a great day! Regards, Last edited by Vandy; 04-04-2011 at 02:03 PM.