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Old 02-16-2011, 09:55 AM   #4
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Great points. Thanks so much. I will shorten the sentences and take out some of the commas.

Also, I could change the last sentence to: With his new perspective, Erik again tries to overcome his demons. Or to: Again, Erik tries to overcome his demons.
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