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Originally Posted by randyflycaster
Keryl,
Your point is well taken. Thanks for your help.
Randy
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You're welcome. I've got no idea if that even does a good job capturing your story, but the first two version seemed to include a lot of "stuff" that's not really important to the heart of the story.
Basically, what is the heart of your story? Is the fact that she uses fly fishing to cope somehow important to the greater scheme of things? (Would the story be markedly different if she was into photography or bird watching?) Is the fact that her adopted dog is along for the ride vital? If the answer is no, then we really don't need to see it in the description.
I did find the idea of the alcoholic traveling companion interesting. I saw that and wanted to know how she came in contact with him, and what his purpose in the story was. But I couldn't think of a quick and graceful way to write him into the blurb. And, if he and how they get together isn't vital to the story, he probably doesn't need to be in the blurb either.
Personally, I don't mind questions in the write up. I really don't mind them if you're intentionally doing some sort of retro thing with your writing.
Good luck with it! And please post your finished version.