Merry, Merry...
@Geoff - "Christmas 2010"
You continue to produce great work, Geoff. It's hard to find fault with a piece about Christmas anyway. As usual, your word images are great and your repeat of the two key lines is handled very well. I very much enjoyed how you brought in both the true meaning of Christmas as well as the "little one's" image of the holiday. As WT Sharpe commented, I can't speak to 70 but I am 60 years in body but the mind still spans across the childhood years.
I had some trouble trying to keep a rhythm within your three line stanzas. I wonder if it might be better if you tried more of an open verse aproach to the piece? If so, you certainly wouldn't want to lose the power of the repeating lines. They really carry the piece.
Another great work, Geoff. I really appreciate your sharing yourself with us and giving us such joy in reading your work.
Once I get home, I'll see to getting more of my own work posted.
Regards,
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