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Thankyou all kindly for your advice. That would definitely clear up the issue in the above example, and will help me greatly with many of the other problems I've brought upon myself.
However I guess where I'm coming from is more from a syntax angle. The ownership issue I was referring to happens quite a lot through my writing, and although the above example can indeed be rectified by moving more directly into the scene, I'm not sure if that solution could be used every single time, (I think I would lose the story's sense of pacing by heading off on tangents every second paragraph).
I suppose what I'm trying to ask is if there is a general rule about dealing with such situations, rather than a solution to the specific example above. Or is that what you've already given me?
I'm pretty thick when it comes to this stuff...
Sincerely,
MK.
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