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Originally Posted by ASparrow
Why not let the reader hear one of these "late night drunken monologues" and let your character tell the reader exactly how he feels. This way you don't need to worry about trying to interpret for the reader what may be a complex emotion. The nuances will come out in your character's own words.
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What Asparrow said.
The problem here is that you're trying to convey something important through telling and by doing so you've backed out far enough that the detail has been lost. If you move closer in and still stick to telling it's going to read like an info-dump.
Take us into the scene and show it to us.
That should clear everything up.