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Vandy · 11-10-2010, 07:33 PM

Hey, All.

I thought I'd start posting some of my work. I'm not going to bother posting in chronological order -- rather, just post "as they come". I will always encourage and solicite constructive criticism of my work. Mind, I said constructive. Negative criticism doesn't do anyone any good and can actually hinder the review of a piece as well as it no use tothe author at all.

My mother died in July of 2003 in Tulsa, OK USA. I was fortunate enough to fly out to see her the day she died and spend a wonderful day with her. This piece "kicked" around in my head for a couple of years before I could put it to paper. It was another year before I coud share it with folks.

"Hello, Mom"

by Gary W. Vanderbur
© August 14, 2006
Write Naturally Publishing House
... a division of VAN Enterprises

As I entered her room, a white-hot mix of emotions coursed through me.
I took her hand, leaned over and kissed her.

"Hello, Mom."

She squeezed my hand and smiled.

"Hello, Son."

Sitting down, I couldn't take my eyes off her.
The memories of a lifetime bubbled up unchecked.

All the good,
All the bad,
All the happy,
All the sad.

We sat quietly, holding hands, our eyes speaking volumes between us.

"I love you, Mom"

"I love you, too, son."

What a pleasant afternoon we had.

The call came around nine that evening.

One by one, we met in her room and took our turns saying goodbye.

I took her hand, leaned over and kissed her.

"Goodbye, Mom. I love you."

How I yearned for her to squeeze my hand and smile.

"Goodbye, son. I love you, too."

This last piece is my "signature" piece -- that is, the piece that I believe defines my personality and myself the best. I use the last line as part of my e-mail signature.

Postscript

by Gary W. Vanderbur
© May 29, 1980
Write Naturally Publishing House
... a division of VAN Enterprises

I come upon you, brave and bold,
And reach my mind out for you to hold.
Think and wonder on what you read.
Dissect and strip it, if you've the need.
But in the end you will see,
You is you and me is me.

I hope you've enjoyed these two pieces. I'll post more as time goes on. Y'all have a great day!

Regards,

11-10-2010, 07:33 PM	#912
Vandy ...always be humble. Posts: 116 Karma: 505917 Join Date: Sep 2010 Location: Fort Myers, FL USA Device: iPhone 5s, iPod Touch 3rd Gen, Kindle 3 WiFi, Kindle Fire	Vandy's first two poetry posts Hey, All. I thought I'd start posting some of my work. I'm not going to bother posting in chronological order -- rather, just post "as they come". I will always encourage and solicite constructive criticism of my work. Mind, I said constructive. Negative criticism doesn't do anyone any good and can actually hinder the review of a piece as well as it no use tothe author at all. My mother died in July of 2003 in Tulsa, OK USA. I was fortunate enough to fly out to see her the day she died and spend a wonderful day with her. This piece "kicked" around in my head for a couple of years before I could put it to paper. It was another year before I coud share it with folks. "Hello, Mom" by Gary W. Vanderbur © August 14, 2006 Write Naturally Publishing House ... a division of VAN Enterprises As I entered her room, a white-hot mix of emotions coursed through me. I took her hand, leaned over and kissed her. "Hello, Mom." She squeezed my hand and smiled. "Hello, Son." Sitting down, I couldn't take my eyes off her. The memories of a lifetime bubbled up unchecked. All the good, All the bad, All the happy, All the sad. We sat quietly, holding hands, our eyes speaking volumes between us. "I love you, Mom" "I love you, too, son." What a pleasant afternoon we had. The call came around nine that evening. One by one, we met in her room and took our turns saying goodbye. I took her hand, leaned over and kissed her. "Goodbye, Mom. I love you." How I yearned for her to squeeze my hand and smile. "Goodbye, son. I love you, too." This last piece is my "signature" piece -- that is, the piece that I believe defines my personality and myself the best. I use the last line as part of my e-mail signature. Postscript by Gary W. Vanderbur © May 29, 1980 Write Naturally Publishing House ... a division of VAN Enterprises I come upon you, brave and bold, And reach my mind out for you to hold. Think and wonder on what you read. Dissect and strip it, if you've the need. But in the end you will see, You is you and me is me. I hope you've enjoyed these two pieces. I'll post more as time goes on. Y'all have a great day! Regards, Last edited by Vandy; 11-11-2010 at 08:51 AM.