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Old 10-27-2010, 06:50 PM   #18
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Originally Posted by GraceKrispy View Post
Where I think it's not great:
She was the one that had let them down with her rush to publish. With her overwhelming need for recognition

Where I think it's ok:
The door flew open and there he stood. Tek. No smile today. All business.
I agree with you. Fragments become tiring to read. When I'm reading good writing, I'm completely swept up and lost in the writer's created world, but when I encounter a fragment such as in your first example, it jolts me out of that world while I re-read it to make sure I haven't misread it.

Writing, while self-expression for the author, is ultimately an experience for the readers. The whole point is for the readers to grasp the meaning at first read. If the author is set on following a personal set of rules of the road, the readers often end up having to re-read sections just to understand the basic "sentence." At that point, the author's self-expression becomes a tad narcissistic.
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